KAAN'S NOTES

OPENING
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- push balloons closer to the stand
- swing camera around on an angle a little bit
- less space between first two dialogue lines
- trim down all sequences
- don't have the pull out wide shot match the other wide shot
- more shots at an angle
- don't show "Eight Balloons" right next to the actual balloons, give it mystery
- simplify the kiosk, like the small round sort of kiosks with the little roofs, add a flag
- you reveal the balloons by rotating around the rounded kiosk
- maybe add candy, balls, sunglasses, postcards, along with the toys as well
- the structure can be simpler, but the inside is rich and full of detail.. sort of like a figure drawing where the detail is in certain facial expressions that then bleeds out to looser sketches of shoulders, etc


SUN
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- don't show the sun until it says "sun" at the end
- sun/balloon POV shots trimmed down or out significantly


HIGHWAY
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- side shot is too long
- so are others (see Kaan's edit)


CACTUS
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- lose the first dropping down shot


BACON
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- trim wide drifting shot


PORCUPINE
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- speed up flirt scene
- cut the face to face scene


CROCODILE
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- show crocodile eye opening first
- trim up scenes


EDING
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- longer fade down
- slower pull out




OTHER NOTES
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- have a female read the poem to test it out
- maybe no particles when it pops
- music can be more playful, doesn't have to be sad
- uplifting happy music
- try both ways though
- try a version with just subtitles and no voices at all
- characters more inspired by michael lau
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